Wednesday, August 29, 2012

"Freed" Hell happens second edition

Freed

Hell happens second edition

Alright everyone, I have finally finished my new book cover for "Freed" and it is amazing.  I'm so happy I broke down and ponied up the dough for this.  It is far better than the other and let's face it, the cover design of a novel can make or break sales.  It is so true.  Here is a picture of the entire book cover, back and fron as well as just a front view.  I hope you all like it.  I fell in love.  It's so beautiful!


Front view


Entire book cover


Tuesday, August 28, 2012

Dark of midnight writer's nightmare!!!

Well, I thought I would finally get around to the final edit of my new novel "Dark of midnight" so I could release it within the next month or so, but I found that Windows 7 locked ALL my documents to include my manuscripts and I cannot edit, copy/paste, or anything.  Now, I will have to rewrite the entire thing if I wish to publish it.  So far I have written the beginning of the novel, not much, but it's a start.  
Here it is.  I hope you like it.

Dark of midnight

Basilisk didn't blink as it watched her from the shadows.  The lovely queen of Karay looked out the window at her ruined kingdom.  Her flaxen hair was swept back in a fishtail braid that draped over the shoulder of her heavy black cloak.  A slight breeze played with the wisps of hair that framed her heart-shaped face.
Basilisk's cat-like pupils dialated from amidst blood red orbs as it studied her.  It couldn't see the color of her eyes from that distance, but remembered their soft amber glow from another life, a life that was long since gone.  
Normal beings would not have been able to see her as well as Basilisk's even with the light from the torches that illuminated her small frame from the grounds below her window. Basilisk was different, however.  It's sight was better than that of a cat's in the rich of midnight.  She didn't seem to notice it watching, anticipating the moment it would take her.
"Soon, dear lady...very soon," it hissed beneath its breath.  For now, it had to feed and its next meal waited.  It slinked off into the night, quiet and unseen.  The soughing of the wind it made and the giant lizard-like pattern it left in the dead, dry earth were the only evidence of its presence.  
Its talons clicked on the stone floor as it scurried into the castle's dungeon.  The guards had never seen it since they were otherwise preoccupied with their desperate and futile attempts to save the kingdom.  No one ever went near the dungeon anymore, not since Basilisk had unleashed the darkness on it.  The people shied away from the evil they surely felt seeping from the dingy, damp walls below the castle.  
Basilisk squeezed through the confilned space of the hall, feeling the cold, irregular stones pressing in on its slimy body.  The long spikes jutting from its spine lightly scratched the ceiling with a screeching sound that echoed back to its ears.  A normal person would have no difficulty fitting through the tunnels beneath the castle, but something as massive as Basilisk had to make quite the effort.
Basilisk could have taken another form, but anticipation was too overwhelming.  It could not concentrate hard enough for the change to happen.  It was worth the difficulty though, especially with dinner waiting and Basilisk was ravenous.
It smelled the delicious fear on the man it was about to consume.  That particular emotion made its food taste remarkably better.  Because of this, Basilisk held its prey captive for long lengths of time.  It periodically gouged small portions from their flesh and ate it in front of them to increase the aroma of fear that wafted from their tormented bodies.  Their terror grew the longer it kept them, which added to their flavor like a succulent marinade.
There he was, the savory little snack.  Tears streaked down the man's dirty face and his bloodshot eyes were swollen from lack of sleep.  Of course, there was no way the pathetic man could sleep knowing he would soon become a very delicious meal.
Basilisk chuckled low in its throat.  The man's skin, torn in places where the creature had sliced away tasty bites, trembled as if he were freezing.  But, it wasn't cold in the dungeon.  Basilisk used magic to raise the temperature to sustain the life of its prey.  No, the man wasn't cold.  He was terror-stricken.
The man shook; his eyes grew wide, bulging in their sockets.  He strained against the chains that bound him, but to no avail.  They only clattered against his efforts and bit deeper into his skin.  Delicious, warm blood trickled down his forearms and dripped onto the dirt floor.  Basilisk's nostrils flared as it took in the intoxicating scent.  The musky air was instantly ripe with the smell of it.
Basilisk's pet leaned against the wall nearby, her tan cloak hanging limply from her petite frame.  Her dull, brown eyes were vacant, but she smiled sweetly.  She had pulled her mousy hair back in a bun and although she was not a pretty woman, she was somehow cute with her large almond-shaped eyes and the minute splash of freckles across the bridge of her turned-up nose.  
She had the ability to rip the voice from anyone she wished.  When the victims screamed, she ripped, and Basilisk devoured.  Her power was the only reason the creature controlled her.  Just like the man sobbing soundlessly from amidst the thick chains that kept him prisoner, she had never stood a chance against Basilisk's powers.  She had soon given in, becoming a mere puppet.  She would never remember any of this if she ever escaped, but that wasn't likely to happen.
The scaly creature watched with amused curiosity as the man quivered.  It relished in the escalating terror that mantled its victim's face from the exertion of trying to scream.  Veins bulged in the man's neck.  The vessel protruding from his forehead looked as though it might burst at any moment.
Try, try, but you'll never make a sound, little man.  Basilisk snickered at its prey's weak struggles for freedom.  Yes, be afraid, be utterly terrified.  The more fear you have, the more delicious you will be.
Dirt flew through the air as the man kicked furiously.  One foot hit Basilisk's front leg with a dull thud.  It was only a nuisance.
Dislocating its elongated jaws with a gruesome, snapping sound, the creature's mouth opened to a massive cave of razor sharp teeth.  Its scaly body shuddered with excitement akin to arousal.
The mouth of its prey gaped in a silent a scream as the freckle-face woman worked her magic.  The dirt between the man's legs darkened as his bladder released its contents.  Basilisk didn't mind.  It was nothing more than a touch of salt that seasoned its prey.
The creature quickly sunk its teeth into the soft, quivering flesh protecting the man's vital organs.  Bones 
cracked, snapped, crunched.  Warm blood erupted into Basilisk's mouth.  It trembled with pleasure as its meal jerked and feebly struck out at his attacker.  Crimson fluid spurted from the man's mouth.  His eyes bulged then slowly dimmed in the last agonizing moment of life.  Yes, fear did taste delicious. 



This is only the intro and it appears the new program I am using to write this has absolutely no spell check to help with typos and it keeps messing up my formatting when I try to save.  Wow, what a headache this is going to be.

Tenses

Tenses

     When you are writing tenses it can really drive you crazy.  It's not always easy to get them right.  I have edited and critiqued so many manuscripts that have major problems in this area.  It's enough to make you pull your hair out.  Most importantly, you need to know that the English form has three different tenses to choose from.  These tenses relate to time:  future, present, and past.  Once you have that established, they are then subdivided into other categories  that you will need to know about and understand.
     There are: simple tense, progressive tense, perfect tense, and perfect progressive tense.
     Yes, I know.  It is confusing.  However, once you have this down, your writing will flow better and sound more professional.  The subdivisions of tenses tell the reader when something in particular will be done, is being done, or has been done.

Ready, set, here we go!

Let's look at simple tense-

Simple past tense- An action that began and ended in the past.  
Simple present tense- An action that is common or repeated.
Simple future tense- An action that will occur in the future.

Examples:

To make it easier to know if you are in the correct form, use the following rules:
Simple past tense- Begin with "Yesterday I...."  Example:  "Yesterday I rode the roller coaster."
Simple present tense- Begin with "Today I..."  Example:  "Today I  ride the roller coaster."
Simple future tense- Begin with "Tomoorow I..."  Example:  "Tomorrow I will ride the roller coaster."

Simple?  No.  Well, we're not done yet.

Let's move on to the progressive tense.  This is a bit of a step up, but I'm sure you'll get it.

Past progressive- An event that was going on at some point in the past.  Note: To create this type of tense, use "were and was" as well as adding (ing) to the verb.
Present progressive- An action that is going on at the time it is being written about.  Note: Use the words "are and am" as well as adding (ing) to the verb to create this tense.
Future progressive- An action that's continuous and will happen some time in the future.  Note: To create this type of tense, use the words "shall be" and "will be" plus add (ing) to the end of the verb.

Examples:

Past progressive-  "I was riding the roller coaster yesterday."
Present progressive- "I am riding the roller coaster today."
Future progressive- "I will be riding the roller coaster tomorrow."

Now we will cover the perfect tense.

Past perfect tense- A past action that occurred prior to another past action.  I know it sounds confusing, but I'll give you examples in a minute.  It really isn't as hard as it seems.  Note:  This is always created by using the word "had" and using the past participle form of the verb.
Present perfect- An action that began in the past, but is still happening at the present time.  Note: Create this form by using the words "have" and "has" in conjunction with the past participle form of the verb.
Future perfect tense- An action in the future that will happen prior to some other action.  Note: Always use the words "will have" when using this tense along with the past participle form of the verb.

Now that you are thoroughly confused, let me give you a few examples to better illustrate these tenses for you.  I know they can be confusing, so don't scream.  Take a breath and relax.  You'll get this.

Examples:

Past perfect tense- "I had ridden the roller coaster ride for  a whole day before I finally went home."
Present perfect tense- "I have ridden the roller coaster ride all day."
Future perfect tense- "I will have ridden the roller coaster ride all day before finally going home."

O.K.  Everyone breathing alright?  You haven't pulled your hair out yet, have you?  I hope not because we are about to move on to the last step to this information download.  Hang in there, you're are almost done!

Past perfect progressive tense- A past continuous action that finished prior to some other past action.  Note: You will always use the words "had been" and add (ing) to the verb to form this tense.
Present perfect tense- An action that has been repeated over time in the past, went on in the present, and will  possibly continue into the future.  Note: Always use the words "has been" and "have been" as well as the past participle form of the verb to create this past tense.
Future perfect tense- A future continuous action that will end prior to some point in the future. Note: Always use the words "will have been" as well as adding (ing) to the end of the verb when writing in this tense.

Take it easy.  I am going to make this a bit easier by adding a few examples.  I won't leave you hanging, I promise.

Examples:

Past perfect tense-  "Before I went home, I had been riding the roller coaster all day."
Present perfect tense- "For the entire day I have been riding the roller coaster ride."
Future perfect tense- "By evening time, I will have been riding the roller coaster all day."

If you are still struggling, check out the following site.  It's great and I'm sure you'll have this down in no time.




Thursday, August 23, 2012

"Freed" Second edition of Hell Happens.

Self-publishing


Due to numerous suggestions, I have changed the title of "Hell Happens" to "Freed", changed the intro of the story, removed most of the profanity, and changed the size of the novel as well as the cover art.

For those of you who are thinking of self-publishing your novel, I have a bit of advice that I hope you take into consideration.  When self-publishing, places like Create Space and Kindle direct publishing don't care if your novel is even print worthy nor do they care if you sale a single copy.  They know you as the author are going to want copies of your novel, and that's where they make their money with you.

You can find literally thousands of poorly written novels on Amazon, so for most of the public who have wasted a considerable amount of money purchasing nothing more than incredible disappointments, chances are they won't purchase yours.  Here's why:  They see that you are a new author and that you are an indie no less, then automatically assume that your work will be just as poorly written.  You can't blame them either.  Most of the time, they won't even chance a look at the blurb on the back, especially if you are new and have NO reviews yet.  You can try to find people willing to give you a review, but you still need a high number of good reviews to make the cut and be searchable on Amazon.  Even then, your novel may still not show up for several pages.  The only way to show up on the first page is to get a high number of sales and let's face it, to do that you have to get your book seen and then to get those viewers to be interested enough to purchase your novel.  Another good way to get sales is if you know a lot of people willing to purchase and review your novel as well as tell numerous other people about your novel.  Word of mouth advertising is amazing, just look at "Fifty shades of grey".  I would have NEVER known about the steamy novels had I not been told about them.  No, I've never read any of them, but I've heard enough to make me blush fifty shades of red and that's enough for me.

Personally, I have followed ALL the suggestions given on so many sites and to no avail.  I still have yet to get my novel seen and therefore purchased.  No one is ever going to purchase what they don't know exists.  I actually can't even find "Freed" when searching for it's EXACT title (I think it may show up on page 60 or so).  Try searching that title and see what pops up..."Fifty shades of grey."  Yup, that's what shows up when you search for my novel.

I even gave several copies of my novel away for free in hopes of receiving a few reviews, whether favorable or not.  So far I have received nothing and it's been months.  I've been told that my story is really good, yet none of those people took the time to say that in a review on Amazon.  Well, that's a bummer.

My point is this, if you think you have a great story and want the world to read it, then send a query package to as many literary agents in your Genre as you can.  Try to get a REAL publisher to represent your work.  If your novel is as good as you think it is, then eventually you will land an agent who can easily get you reviews and make it so the public knows your novel is there.

Of course, there are those rare occasions when a self-published novel makes it to the top, but this isn't likely for most indie writers.  You can't expect to get the same results and you more than likely won't.  So, by all means stay clear of self-publishing unless you only want a few copies for family and friends.  Keep contacting literary agents and keep writing.  Expect rejection letters but don't let them drop your spirits.  Keep going and never give up.